Sunday, August 09, 2009

correction

here's the line they wrote:
Loud outbursts, hot tempers and pleas for civility at town hall meetings around the country Saturday foreshadowed a long, hot August as Democratic lawmakers returning home faced resistance to proposals to reform the nation's costly health care system.
And here's what it ought to say:
Loud outbursts, hot tempers and pleas for civility at town hall meetings around the country Saturday foreshadowed a long, hot August as Democratic lawmakers returning home faced organized resistance to proposals to reform the nation's costly health care system.
See, when they just say "resistance", it sounds like it's a general resistance, whereas "organized resistance" indicates an orchestrated event.

2 comments:

Unknown said...

This is a new form and offshoot of viral advertising - to making these so called "organized events" look like grassroots moments. It is like when WalMart and others were using bloggers to "write" for them - sending them what to post and having bloggers post as if it were their own words (they have been doing this again with twitter - why else would Walmart come up as a big time trending topic?)

But what is scary is the egoism involved with these tactics. maybe 5 percent of my students say that they do not want change in health care--all the rest, even those hard core free market types, thinks that health care should be a right and not a privilege!

Sorry for being gone again - I get my act together and then things fall apart, I've got to clean up and get the act together again. Hope to be around more consistently! R

sbh said...

Here's what it really ought to say:

"Noisy demonstrations and vain pleas for civility at town hall meetings around the country Saturday foreshadowed a long hot August as lawmakers returning home faced organized attempts to silence discussion of proposals to reform the nation’s broken health care system."